🎥How Twitter Ruined A Life - The Patrick Tomlinson Saga (Part 1)

[Daddy Warbucks]

Part 2 is being written now. It'll cover the suspension of r/OpieAndAnthony and Pats lawsuit

 

[guest]

The more the merrier

 

[NoBacon]

This is way better than Porsalin’s cooky pun filled gags, just telling the story straight up is hilarious.

 

[The Talking Dead]

This is way better than Porsalin’s cooky pun filled gags, just telling the story straight up is hilarious.

You don't think adding a wacky, five-word descriptor before every single name in a documentary adds to its value??

 

[guest]

Some constructive criticism:

• The minute and a half trigger warning is not necessary
• For people that have never heard of Fatrick, you'll want to capture their attention. This is the hardest part for anyone making a video about him. If you simply "start from the beginning", you might lose a lot of people who will be thinking "Why should I care about this faggot". Maybe cherry pick a few greatest hits and throw them into the beginning with some kind of "How did we get here?"
• If you're going to use an AI voice, you might as well have AI Patrick reading his posts.

 

[CQ Beans]

This is way better than Porsalin’s cooky pun filled gags, just telling the story straight up is hilarious.

8:32 ‘Patrick even started a new Twitter account where he pretended to be his OWN cat’

 

[NoBacon]

Some constructive criticism:

• The minute and a half trigger warning is not necessary
• For people that have never heard of Fatrick, you'll want to capture their attention. This is the hardest part for anyone making a video about him. If you simply "start from the beginning", you might lose a lot of people who will be thinking "Why should I care about this faggot". Maybe cherry pick a few greatest hits and throw them into the beginning with some kind of "How did we get here?"
• If you're going to use an AI voice, you might as well have AI Patrick reading his posts.

I've been doing some thinking, and I got some ideas to improve the show. I got it right here. Uh, one: Shane Nokes needs to be louder, angrier and have access to a time machine. Two: Whenever Shane Nokes not on screen, all the other characters should be asking, "Where's Nokes?"

 

[DrTorqueCarlisi]

Well done brotherman. Good times.

 

[SpaceEdge]

Some constructive criticism:

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• For people that have never heard of Fatrick, you'll want to capture their attention. This is the hardest part for anyone making a video about him. If you simply "start from the beginning", you might lose a lot of people who will be thinking "Why should I care about this faggot". Maybe cherry pick a few greatest hits and throw them into the beginning with some kind of "How did we get here?

Name drop for the "what's the hook" stuff. You have some known people involved, Anna Merlin was front page news on Joe Rogan who was a regular guest on oNa, Shane gillis SNL Seth Simon's was the one who did that, multiple news agencies have pulled Patrick's articles, Josiah's real identity is Danny teeson. Stuff like that.

 

[The Talking Dead]

If you're going to use an AI voice, you might as well have AI Patrick reading his posts.

I guarantee pig would copyright claim the video for "unauthorized use of my voice, involuntary pornography and rape" if he did that.

I agree with your 2nd point though. There's a reason every podcasting faggot now will open with a compilation of the most interesting parts of the interview.

 

[Torque’sHeadBump]

Maybe cherry pick a few greatest hits and throw them into the beginning with some kind of "How did we get here?"

Might I suggest some of his classic responses? “You did not fart in my wife’s vagina, child.” is good but there are literally tons of others.

 

[DrTorqueCarlisi]

I've been doing some thinking, and I got some ideas to improve the show. I got it right here. Uh, one: Shane Nokes needs to be louder, angrier and have access to a time machine. Two: Whenever Shane Nokes not on screen, all the other characters should be asking, "Where's Nokes?"

No, no, no. This Nokes guy will be terrible for ratings! You've got no attitude, you're barely outrageous, and I don't know what you're in, but it's not my face. Next!

 

[SpaceEdge]

Shane Nokes gets... A pet monkey?! Who solves Microsoft Support claims?!

 

[Udders]

I haven't watched it yet but the opening of a Pat doc should always be, "I've been SWATted 47 times because I said Norm MacDonald wasn't funny." Instant hook and it always sounds ridiculous and hilarious at the same time.

 

[gassers]

Part 2 is being written now. It'll cover the suspension of r/OpieAndAnthony and Pats lawsuit

I can't tell if it's AI Voice or the guy has genuine broadcasting voice.

 

[guest]

I can't tell if it's AI Voice or the guy has genuine broadcasting voice.

You can tell by the overly long pauses at the commas that it's an AI voice. He also confirmed this in his previous post.

 

[Libby Son Of Loin]

Some constructive criticism:

• The minute and a half trigger warning is not necessary
• For people that have never heard of Fatrick, you'll want to capture their attention. This is the hardest part for anyone making a video about him. If you simply "start from the beginning", you might lose a lot of people who will be thinking "Why should I care about this faggot". Maybe cherry pick a few greatest hits and throw them into the beginning with some kind of "How did we get here?"
• If you're going to use an AI voice, you might as well have AI Patrick reading his posts.

The best hook would have been "How a Tweet about Norm MacDonald Ruined Someone's Life" and some gay thumbnail with Norm and Pat with soy faces surrounded by obnoxious red outlines

Basically the problem with this video is literally nothing is stated in the first 3 minutes which is 25% of the runtime

Scratch that, not a single piece of information is presented until the 5 min mark

 

[Faggot Boqposter]

Can we crowdfund paying Jackie Singh to narrate this? She needs the cash.

 

[Opesterino]

I think it should be important to mention the blue twitter checkmark - that is what started all of this. made him believe he was way more important than he was and he didn't get that back after the 5k (if he paid 5k or not I don't know - everything he says is a lie).

and now the checkmarks are worthless anyways - so tee hee pig

 

[BudDickman]

I think the best way to hook viewers is to juxtapose the interview clips where he's claiming victimhood with clips of him being an absolutely maniac against Josiah.

That would do a good job of giving his perspective while letting the viewer know that there's more than meets the eye.

There's a reason why every respectable outlet that has covered this has gone along with his narrative, and it's the fact that it is easier to relate to a story about someone harassed relentlessly. They're going with the "it could happen to you" angle and making people wonder what they would do in this situation. I think it makes sense to frame the story in the same way and then gradually make the viewer less and less sympathetic with him. This is basically what Javier did, but he didn't go all the way with it.